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Thursday, October 5, 2006
Exemplary Work -Sirius Ng
Hi 5E,
I would like to showcase an exemplary e-mail on the recent situational writing that you did (e-mailing your cousin Jane about Homes Around the World exhibition) dated 4th Oct.
The situational writing is by Sirius. The good points about his writing are;-
- appropriate paragraphs (each paragraph has a certain point that is beind discussed)
- his writing doesn't sound 'forced' (most of you are virtually asnwering the key points that
needed to be covered and stringing them into paragraphs).
- There is a 'friendly and informal' feel to his e-mail, as if he is really wrting to his cousin Jane.
Simple things like writing a simple farewell to your 'cousin' eg "Hope to see you again" makes your writing feels more genuine.
- almost negligible grammatical errors.
The only thing that I hope Sirius can improve upon is his introductory paragraph. It makes me wonder why he never bothered to ask his 'cousin' about her health, etc and instead chose to jump into the objective of the e-mail.
The following is the writing by Sirius. Good job!
Yesterday, I attended an exhibition about homes around the world. It is about homes in other countries and how people live in them. It was presented by the Singapore Art Museum.
That day when I visited the art museum, I learnt that the Eskimo igloo has a skylight! I also found out that Indian tepees are cone-shaped tents covered with the hides of buffaloes!
The exhibition is held at the Singapore Art Museum, 71 Bras Basah Road, Singapore 189555. It starts from 10 June 2005 and ends on the 18 June 2005. There are no admission fees. Hope you will be there to attend the exhibition! Bye!
Best Regards
Sirius
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I would like to showcase an exemplary e-mail on the recent situational writing that you did (e-mailing your cousin Jane about Homes Around the World exhibition) dated 4th Oct.
The situational writing is by Sirius. The good points about his writing are;-
- appropriate paragraphs (each paragraph has a certain point that is beind discussed)
- his writing doesn't sound 'forced' (most of you are virtually asnwering the key points that
needed to be covered and stringing them into paragraphs).
- There is a 'friendly and informal' feel to his e-mail, as if he is really wrting to his cousin Jane.
Simple things like writing a simple farewell to your 'cousin' eg "Hope to see you again" makes your writing feels more genuine.
- almost negligible grammatical errors.
The only thing that I hope Sirius can improve upon is his introductory paragraph. It makes me wonder why he never bothered to ask his 'cousin' about her health, etc and instead chose to jump into the objective of the e-mail.
The following is the writing by Sirius. Good job!
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Dear Jane,Yesterday, I attended an exhibition about homes around the world. It is about homes in other countries and how people live in them. It was presented by the Singapore Art Museum.
That day when I visited the art museum, I learnt that the Eskimo igloo has a skylight! I also found out that Indian tepees are cone-shaped tents covered with the hides of buffaloes!
The exhibition is held at the Singapore Art Museum, 71 Bras Basah Road, Singapore 189555. It starts from 10 June 2005 and ends on the 18 June 2005. There are no admission fees. Hope you will be there to attend the exhibition! Bye!
Best Regards
Sirius
Grade: 8/10
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Monday, October 2, 2006
Coming Soon.....
version 2
version 1
concept by Mdm Haryana
design and photography by Mr Danny :)
One of the highlight for this weekend was designing the CD Cover for the upcoming musical Chris Galiston and the Seven Seeds this November. The musical will be the last school event before the school closes for the Nov-Dec holidays (whoopee!).
By the looks of it, the musical is indeed going to be grand and the virtually the whole school will be part of this extravaganza. It is an understatement to say that the musical is going to be an unforgetable experience.
It is of key interest to also note that 2 pupils of P5E will also be involved in the performance and they are none other than Felicia and Michelle. As for me, I'll be the event photographer for the day so do remember to smile.
The only question that remains is;- have you ordered your tickets yet? :)
Happy Children's Day
To P5E and the children of the world,
Happy Children's Day!
Have a wonderful weekend ahead :)
Happy Children's Day!
Have a wonderful weekend ahead :)
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